02-19-2012 12:31 PM
Glad to see you took on board the suggestions made Paul. Your book looks all the better for it. As Ken suggested in the previous thread, your cover is possibly a little bland for some people's tastes and there is nothing there for the eye to be drawn to, to pique that initial customer curiosity!
But that's subjective I guess and all tastes are different.
Your poems are good and I can tell they were written enthusiastically, with passion and belief.
May I query - as one poet speaking to another (though my poetry book isn't out quite yet!) - a line from the poem Beam Of Light on page 10 of your preview.
Line 2 - "Darking of man is appending."
I was unfamilar with the word 'darking' and when I googled it, the Urban Dictionary defined it as 'pissing someone off'. By the same token, 'appending' is defined as ' to add as a supplement or appendix'. So does the line refer to a man who annoys someone on a supplemental basis ?
I say that tongue in cheek - I appreciate that a lot of poetry is open to interpretation, but only if the construction of the initial sentence serves as a springboard for that in the first place. That line I quoted was only a springboard for confusion for me, I am afraid.
Oh and Paul, never be too sensitive to take on board comments. I know in the previous thread you came across as defensive. There is no need to be. Criticism, as long as it is given in a thoughtful, considered way (with a touch of humour as well, maybe!) can only be for the greater good.
I have had my work criticised and yes, it is frustrating, especially when it is grammatical errors that have been genuinely overlooked, but I just knuckle down and try and correct them as I am always striving for my book to look as professional ad possible (which in turn, makes it more saleable).
02-19-2012 03:22 PM
Darking is a word. It is the opposite to lighting. It has the same meaning as darkening just a slightly different word. I don't mind about the cover and it shouldnt matter how simple it is. I don't have many good original pics to put on there plus if I used a google image, I'd have to get permission ect and I dont want to waste any more time. I am in a 15 hour job on min wage and we have a recession. So many people have given me incredibly high praise comparing my work to Shakespear and Picasso and yes they were genuine.I only get critics once in a blue moon. I didnt get published before because I know very little about the process plus it cost money. Then I read about lulu on allpoetry.com. I can easily make more books from my remaining poems. I am going to be interviewed by my friend who works in local radio, so that is some extra promo. My poems are good enough for the reader to understand. There may be a couple of missing commas maybe but that hasn't been a majar issue so far. It took me so long to get this far and a lot of courage, With the previous comments made in the previous forumn I felt so depressed because I wasn't used to that and I am VERY sensitive. I'm not saying I am the best but I certainly not the worst.
02-19-2012 03:24 PM
There is no need to be rude, Kevin. I am not a pro publisher like you. I am trying to put some love and life back into the world. I am sorry that you feel you have be sarcastic.
02-19-2012 05:56 PM
02-20-2012 12:54 AM
I think you'll find it is a word, it is on google and has two meanings. One is to annoy someone and the other is slang ie "is it darking outside?" Ok maybe it doesnt really work in my sentence, that means i have to redo the whole book? No wonder no one is buying it I keep taking it off the market. Right I shall change it today. Also I have a question. I tried adding extra poems and it said it can only do 100 at a time yet the wizard said up to 7 hundred and something pages. How?
02-20-2012 06:30 AM
02-20-2012 07:06 AM - edited 02-20-2012 07:09 AM