Glad to see you took on board the suggestions made Paul. Your book looks all the better for it. As Ken suggested in the previous thread, your cover is possibly a little bland for some people's tastes and there is nothing there for the eye to be drawn to, to pique that initial customer curiosity!
But that's subjective I guess and all tastes are different.
Your poems are good and I can tell they were written enthusiastically, with passion and belief.
May I query - as one poet speaking to another (though my poetry book isn't out quite yet!) - a line from the poem Beam Of Light on page 10 of your preview.
Line 2 - "Darking of man is appending."
I was unfamilar with the word 'darking' and when I googled it, the Urban Dictionary defined it as 'pissing someone off'. By the same token, 'appending' is defined as ' to add as a supplement or appendix'. So does the line refer to a man who annoys someone on a supplemental basis ?
I say that tongue in cheek - I appreciate that a lot of poetry is open to interpretation, but only if the construction of the initial sentence serves as a springboard for that in the first place. That line I quoted was only a springboard for confusion for me, I am afraid.
Oh and Paul, never be too sensitive to take on board comments. I know in the previous thread you came across as defensive. There is no need to be. Criticism, as long as it is given in a thoughtful, considered way (with a touch of humour as well, maybe!) can only be for the greater good.
I have had my work criticised and yes, it is frustrating, especially when it is grammatical errors that have been genuinely overlooked, but I just knuckle down and try and correct them as I am always striving for my book to look as professional ad possible (which in turn, makes it more saleable).
Regards
Riaz
So you are using the Poem Wizard then? I forget now.
