04-09-2012 11:28 PM
I never thought I'd enjoy writing, but I found I love it. I've currently just published a poetry book on Lulu called Collections of a Dreamer. It is a non-linear story of a father meeting a son in a poetic scrambled dream, and the son reuniting with the father at the end. The entire work is really one continous poem, told in through a series of connected unique poems, and each are filled with riddles and ways to read it differently. There a clues hidden in the poems, and in the format, check it my new book out if you're interested. Thanks.
04-10-2012 06:22 AM
I don't understand the poems but I think they could be presented better.
The Table of Contents is a mess with ragged edges right and left and inconsistent capitalisation
The poem on page 4 is in a larger size font the the others. Again odd capitlisation why are the first and last words of the title in capitals and the middle one not?
You've opted for an ISBN so presumably you want the book to appear on Amazon but its very expensive for 41 pages. You've not shown the ISBN inside so you cannot get distribution. Add a coupl more pages at the front for title, copyright/ISBN ...
04-10-2012 06:23 AM
PS _ I never understand why people ask us the look at their book but do not give a link to it. Here is is http://www.lulu.com/shop/ephraim-hallford/collecti
04-10-2012 07:25 AM
Describing a collection of poems by saying "each are filled with riddles and ways to read it differently" can be a 'get out clause' for those lacking poetic skills. It just means 'I've written a mess but if I pretend the mess is intentional, then I might fool someone."
Implying a flowerbed can rest in a hut (as you do in your 'Birds and Flowerbeds' poem) isn't poetic license. It's just plain silly and doesn't work.