03-24-2012 10:26 PM - edited 03-25-2012 08:21 AM
Hello my name is Andrea Jones and I just wrote my first book. I would love some feedback on it so please go check it out. Its called Living In Sin. http://www.lulu.com/content/paperback-book/living-
03-25-2012 11:06 AM
Welcome Andrea and congratulations. It's hard work creating a book.
You ask for feedback.You have a striking cover and a great title page, so far very professional looking.
To make the rest of the book look to the same standard as ones found on the shelves of bookshops I can only repeat the suggestions made here many times previously, and if you look at a commercially published novel you'll see where I am coming from.
- justify the text, i.e. straight edge right and left
- use serif a font for the text
- use smart/curly apostrophes & quotes
- new line for quoted dialogue
I think Ok should be either OK or okay
I think pc should be PC but better to say 'he was studying computer repair'
I don't think you need to capitalise 'reggae'
'she had went to school to get a plus certified', I'm not clear what that means; should that be A-plus, or "she had gone to school to get certified in xxxxxx and passed A-plus"
The authors note doesn't need the first eight words, the reader knows novels are fictional.
I'm getting picky now, but Angela's house is 'beautiful', Lyndsey's house is 'beautiful', Lyndsey's staircase is 'beautiful',might be worth using other words or even better describing them so the reader can can understand why they are beautiful.
Please don't take above as criticisms, just some suggestions you're free to take or reject that are given with the aim of helping you sell more copiesof your book.
03-26-2012 06:33 AM
Looking much better - do you agree?.
I think the quoted dialogue lines should have the first line indented like a new paragraph is.
Also look at the page numbers - see if you can get the odd numbers at the right edge, and even at the left edge (on Word - Page Layout>Page Setup>Layout then tick different odd & even pages) If not, put them in the centre.
You'll find that writing the book is just the start, formatting it so it looks good takes a lot of effort. And when you get the paperback in your hand you'll find things you missed reading it on the screen.
BTW - is that you on the cover?
03-26-2012 09:56 AM
You did a great job! Especially for someone's first time out! You have every reason to be proud. I hope you'll take Peter's suggestions seriously: they will make your book look much more professional. One suggestion I would add would be to remove page numbers from all but the main text pages.
03-26-2012 06:13 PM
I do agree it looks better. I did have the text indented then changed it back, idk why though. I'm going to work on the page numbers also. I knew it was going to be hard work so I'm pacing myself. Yes I am on the cover.