01-11-2012 07:56 PM
No, you have done the right thing and even in the right place
A Preview would have been handy.
I suppose anyone can have any name they wish, but a Seraphim is an angel (in old Hebrew) and I think a Maejai is a Buddhist holyman, so you have a couple of oddly mixed things there.
Turning 360 degs brings you back to the same spot, so she has not actually changed direction ... I would say her life goes off at a tangent.
Mist burned Seraphim then? (And it should read Seraphim's).
What is girlxgirl? Does that = many girls?
'Crap' is such an ugly word to use in a description.
Merlin and King Arthur? OK, why not ...
You cover gives the impression Seraphim is Japanese. I did not realise they are a race of magical beings
01-11-2012 08:06 PM - edited 01-11-2012 08:17 PM
There's a reason why Seraphim was given her name but that's a spoiler :3 Thank you I'll re-edit the description when I can. I've never heard the word Maejai used for buddhism. The cover is made to be anime, because it was inspired by a lot of anime and a lot of people told me it had that feel. Should I say yuri then? or just lesbian? ^^ Where did I say crap? O.o
I should have a preview. I'll have to put it up when I get home I'm in Texas now, and the book is on my PC at home.
01-11-2012 08:18 PM
01-11-2012 10:49 PM
Ohh that. xD That depends on how good your imagination is I don't think a preview would be good enough to give some one an opinion on it. like demos.
Oh you think rationally? completely opposite from me xD
01-11-2012 11:03 PM
Yuri can mean many things, it's even a common name.
The first thing people see is the cover, then the description, then they look for a Preview. Those are your 'Adverts', even for something that cheap.
Then again we are not 'people' here, we are also writers and publishers (and artists) who like to offer advice on what you have created. This is a self-publishing site :-)
01-11-2012 11:33 PM
True it is a russian boys name I'm sure the word "same-sex" would mean she's a lesbian ^^' Thank you though, when I get home I'll put one up. Is the preview like the beginning chapters? I think the beggining is pretty slow..
01-11-2012 11:37 PM - edited 01-11-2012 11:37 PM
01-12-2012 02:41 AM
Not sure if I can do this but the kindle version has a preveiw up.
I just hope everthing flows well. Iy's written like it would be an anime, and that stuff tends to be irrational so I don't know how it would apeal to some people ^^; a lot of my inspiration came from that stuff.
I'll put one up here once I get back home.