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francesn
Posts: 43
Registered: ‎06-29-2011

Re: My first novel - looking for any feedback or reviews. :)

 

Great thank you very much, I'll take a look now... did you go out of 'grammar police' mode and actually read the story, at all? :smileyhappy:

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matthewcchiversathotmaildotcodotuk
Posts: 265
Registered: ‎06-25-2010

Re: My first novel - looking for any feedback or reviews. :)

hahaha!! :smileywink: I've read through alot of it and defo think their is potential (its the proof that takes the most time as I need to re-read a sentance like 10 times lol) so I defo think you should continue with it. The characters are easily portrayed and likeable, and when you "see" how a proof should look, it'll make you an even better writer :smileyhappy: - your writing was nigh on 95% spot on, so it is defo not as bad as people have said - it is just a case of understanding punctuation and a tiny amount of grammar for the most part :smileyhappy:

Good luck with it francesn, and when you've updated it and gone through it - send it to me again, and when I get round to it when my schedules not so hectic, I'll give more of it a read in greater depth :smileyhappy:


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"Those who let fate lead them roll the dice. Those who lead themselves never roll them at all." - Orchestra, Vol. II.
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francesn
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Registered: ‎06-29-2011

Re: My first novel - looking for any feedback or reviews. :)

 

Matthew, I read briefly over your corrections, yes I think it makes it better looking. Now I just have to try and make the rest of it look like that:smileyfrustrated: I'm taking that you did the whole doc you sent me back, and in the later part, there were no mistakes?

Ah if you have the time keep just reading, and let me know what you of it, it would be appreciated :smileyhappy:

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matthewcchiversathotmaildotcodotuk
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Re: My first novel - looking for any feedback or reviews. :)

The other half of the story I didn't have time to do, very busy!

But pay careful attention to the corrections and then apply it to the rest of the documents :smileyhappy:


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"Those who let fate lead them roll the dice. Those who lead themselves never roll them at all." - Orchestra, Vol. II.
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francesn
Posts: 43
Registered: ‎06-29-2011

Re: My first novel - looking for any feedback or reviews. :)

 

OK that's fine :smileyhappy:

I will try :smileyhappy:

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francesn
Posts: 43
Registered: ‎06-29-2011

Re: My first novel - looking for any feedback or reviews. :)

 

So, I finally finished it. It's been corrected by a copy editor, so it should be error free :smileyhappy:

 

Here's a new website,

http://lilliandthemunsterz.weebly.com/

Would love any feedback :smileyhappy:

 

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